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Problem, Cause, and Solution PIE Paragraphs

One of the systemic education problems is that the financial aid system doesn’t offer financial help to students. For example, When students doesn’t recive financial help they are just worry about how they going to pay for their tuition. When they don’t have money to pay for they tuition they might thinking in not continue with school. In the memoir Educated, Tara Westover had this problem when she first started school at Brigham Young University. Westover (2018) wrote, “My bank account decreased steadily, I had been worried that I might not pass my classes, but a month into the semester, after I’d paid tuition and rent and bought food and books, I began to think that even if I pass I wouldn’t be coming back to school for one obvious reason: I couldn’t afford it” (p. 239). Westover said that she might not continue with school because she doesn’t have enough money to pay her rent and her tuition. If financial aid provides her help, she might not be thinking in leave the shcool. This concludes that the financial help system is a big problem with students’ education.
The first cause of this problem comes from student parent income. Financial aid offer financial help to students based on they parent income. The financial aid system assumes that a if a student parent income is high enough they will be able to cover their son or doughter tuition. For example, I have a friend who was studying at Skagit valley college she couldn’t qualified for financial aid because her parent’s income was too high. Financial aid thought that her parent would help her because their income was high enough. What financial did not know is that her parent wouldn’t help her pay for college tuition. This leads her to stop with her education and looks for work so she can save money to pay for college.
The second, cause is that they are hard on the requirement. Financial aid require students to be a full time student in order to qualify for financial aid. When financial aid require student to take 3 classes, they can not learn all the material that they are studying When student take more than three classes, they can not learn what they are studying because is too much for their brain. For example in “ A Glossary of Common Lerning Terms.” John Webster’s ( 2020) wrote, “Our brains work easily with a few concepts or numbers at once, but when we work with more than three to five entities the “load” begins to get heavy.” This what happened to student when the financial aid require them to take three classes. When student take three classes it is difficul for them to learn all the three subject they are studying. Their brain can’t process well all the information they are learning. This leads to a bad GPA at the end of the quarter because they did not perform well on the assignment because it was too much information for their brain.
First solution is that financial aid should not offer financial aid help base on students parent income. Not all parent help their son or daughter to pay for college. For example as I mention before my friend parent didn’t help her to pay for her college tuition. Even her parent income was high they didn’t help her to pay for her college tuition. This is what many student face todays their parent income does not have nothing to do with them. For this reason financial aid should not focus on student parent income in order to offer them financial aid. Financial aid system should help students independently not base on their parent income.



A solution to financial aid system problem is to change the hard requirement that they have on students. For example the financial aid should provide financial aid for part time students and not just for full time students. If financial aid don’t change their requirement, students are more likely are more to not continue with their education. For example, one of my other frind coldn’t qualified for financial aid because she was a part time students. Since she couldn’t qualified for financial aid she stop attending college. The last time I talk with her she told me that she might not come back to college because she work and she can not be a full time student. For For this reason, financial aid needs to change the hard requirement and be able to help all students no matter if they are part time or full time students by doing this financial aid will help students to achieve their goals.
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why do you think it necessary for people to understand political science?​

Why did Woolf write about gender equality at a time when she was achieving
success as a writer?
A. Because her father was overbearing and forbade her from getting
an education
B. Because women writers were being denied opportunities that men
were given
C. Because women writers were not proving themselves to be
talented in the writing they produced
D. Because she wanted to become an English professor and was
denied the chance

I think I forgot the question, I'll ask again if I remember it.

^ Is there a better way to say it​

What effect does the letter have on Brutus ?

10. O Captain! my Captain! our fearful trip is done;
The ship has weather'd every rack, the prize we sought is won;
The port is near, the bells I hear, the people all exulting,
while follow eyes the steady keel, the vessel grim and daring:
But o heart! heart! heart!
o the bleeding drops of red,
Where on the deck my Captain lies,
Fallen cold and dead.
O Captain! my Captain! rise up and hear the bells;
Rise up for you the flag is flung-for you the bugle trills;
For you bouquets and ribbon'd wreaths-for you the shores a-crowding;
For you they call, the swaying mass, their eager faces turning;
Here Captain! dear father!
This arm beneath your head;
It is some dream that on the deck,
You've fallen cold and dead.
My Captain does not answer, his lips are pale and still;
My father does not feel my arm, he has no pulse nor will;
The ship is anchor'd safe and sound, its voyage closed and done;
From fearful trip, the victor ship, comes in with object won;
Exult, o shores, and ring, o bells!
But I, with mournful tread,
Walk the deck my Captain lies,
Fallen cold and dead.
In one paragraph of at least three to five sentences, analyze the imagery in the stanza in
bold. Identify the mood the author intended to create with this imagery, as well as the
connotations used in the diction. Use proper spelling and grammar. (10 points)

this is the excerpt for my last question​

I NEED SOMEONE TO GIVE FEEDBACK FOR THESE PARAGRAPHS RIGHT NOW! I AM GIVING BRAINLIEST

Directions: Read and analyze the 4 paragraphs from our classes' Personal Narrative assignment.
In a Google Doc or Slides analyze EACH paragraph by identifying the errors and providing specific feedback on how to improve each one. The paragraph must have a triumph.
*You are NOT allowed to inquire about the author of the paragraphs. This will result in you losing points off YOUR grade.*

PARAGRAPHS:
1. A time l got a great Victory was in Florida, I was playing football
games with my team and I. We needed to make it to the
championship so we played our first 3 games and won those games.
So when we advanced to the championship it wasnt really easy. We
went to overtime and they played their drive. They didn't score most
likely because their touchdown kept getting called back. Then when
we played our drive we scored ended up winning the rings.

2. A time l got a great Victory was in Florida, I was playing football
games with my team and I. We needed to make it to the
championship so we played our first 3 games and won those games.
So when we advanced to the championship it wasnt really easy. We
went to overtime and they played their drive. They didnt score most
likely because their touchdown kept getting called back. Then when
we played our drive we scored ended up winning the rings.

3.When I was younger, about 3 or 4 years old. My parents had a car accident with my moms old red van. We had been going to a store to get some clothes in Greenbelt, and on the Beltway. Someone that my mom knew crashed into us. None of us were severely hurt, but the next day we had to go to the hospital for a check-up. I ended up being in a cast for about 1 week and a half, as doctors said that I broke my arm. I was still able to do things with that arm, just couldn’t do as much as I usually would. For example, I could feed myself and others, but couldn’t do some at-home exercises like pushups.

4.My challenge that led to a triumph was when my family came
to stay at my house for a couple hours and I could not think
of a challenge that led to a triumph until they left I realized
that they were a distraction and I could not figure out how to
complete this assignment then I realized that one challenge
that led to triumph was when I got a bad grade and I figured
it was my focus and I changed spaces to do class in my
house I am more productive I get my stuff done and I feel
more relaxed and excited for the next day.And that's my
personal narrative.

IF SOMEONE COULD PLEASE SEND FEEDBACK ON ALL OF THESE BY MIDNIGHT, IT WOULD BE GREAT! I NEED FEEDBACK ON THESE AS MY ASSIGNMENT. I AM GIVING BRAINLIEST!

When you find out Percy’s true identity, are you surprised or did you see it coming? What clues were given earlier in the book?

“Rhetoric, you say? What’s that?” What is his definition? (You may quote or paraphrase.

In The Diary of Anne Frank, Act II, why does Anne leave her diary behind when the Nazis come to take the families and Mr. Dussel away?
O
А.
She is tired of writing in it.
B.
She does not want it to get ruined.
o o
C. The Nazis said they could take only clothing
o
D. She leaves it as a clue to where the Nazis take her.

How did alyohin defined love?​

When a modest increase in price has little to no effect on the quantity demanded, the demand for that product is


inelastic

complementary

elastic

unit elastic

Give at least 3 conditions of processed fruits

Which of the following is an example of a counterargument?

The only language that should be used in fictional stories is _____.

• the standard grammar that is taught in schools
• the vernacular and dialect appropriate to the story
• the type of word choice that has more than one meaning
• the grammar of the spoken word
Answer as soon as you can I'm working ahead so I have time to play on ThanksGiving!

to revise sentence 3, which of these should use to add specific details

a. the soccer team teaches its players many important skills

b. I did not know much before I started playing on the soccer team

c. i learned about teamwork and working with others while on the team

d. playing on the soccer team taught me things i did not know before​

Why does a doctor take an x-ray of an animal?



a.
to teach the animal a lesson


b.
to learn what the animal likes to eat


c.
to find out if the animal is hurt or sick


d.
to give the animal medicine

You should use quotation marks around material you have cited when




you've paraphrased what an author said.


you want the author to find your paper online.


you're using an author's exact words.


you want the information you have cited to stand out.

List some of the benefits to Green building:

Name three behaviors Old
Major says should be
forbidden after the revolution.

EASY IF YOUVE READ HARRY POTTER!!
what is one lesson that harry potter learned in the first book? give an example

what do you think people should say more often? explain in a sentences your answer ​

Why can’t Gary hear “the things in his heart”?

This is really dumb to ask I'm pretty sure I know the answer but I just wanna make sure.

Which of the following is something our government can dictate?

A. How birthdays could be celebrated

B. Taxes people have to pay

IT'S A FREE 10 POINTS SO PLEASE HELPPPPPPPPPPPPPP

Read the excerpt from "Healthy Eating." Which evidence does the author use to support the argument that people can improve their health by making small changes to their diets? "I was taking all these pills like an old woman," said Naar, a neonatology nurse at Baptist Hospital. "My blood pressure is hereditary, but I added to it by adding the pounds and eating horribly every day."... O an expert quotation O scientific facts O an anecdote historical information A nutritionist took her shopping and introduced her to the joys of cauliflower. She upped her workouts, stopped eating hamburgers three times a week and scaled back on the Cold Stone pistachio ice cream. Today, Naar is 20 pounds lighter and down to two pills a day.​

Give FIVE SENTENCES of: Why do you think it is important to write a letter of consent when conducting a survey? ​

He _______ then wine as we speak (taste)
Is the book you _______ any good (read) ​

What do outlining, mapping, and cubing have in common during the prewriting process? Check all that apply.

They help you understand the purpose of your paper.
They help you organize your ideas for your paper.
They all use images to show the flow of your paper.
They help you generate ideas for your paper.
They can help you plan your paper.

As he sat and regained his breath, he noted that he was feeling quite warm and comfortable. He was not shivering, and it even seemed that a warm glow had come to his chest and trunk. Then the thought came to him that the frozen portions of his body must be extending, and he made another wild run along the trail. And all the time the dog ran with him, at his heels.
What is the character’s motivation in the excerpt?

The man is internally motivated by his loyalty to the dog.
The man is internally motivated by a survival instinct.
The man is externally motivated by the hope of peer recognition.
The man is externally motivated by the urgings of the dog.

1 . what type of noun is parish?

a. proper
b. collective
c. common
d. abstract